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Sophie Davis College Essay

I'm currently a rising senior and this is a program that I am extremely bent on getting into, as it would be the only way that I could even get into medical school. My financial situation is tough, and there is no guarantee that I would even be able to afford to go through the traditional pre-medicine route in a regular undergrad. To put it into perspective...if I can't get into the Sophie Davis program, I will have to settle for colleges like Brooklyn or other CCNY schools, because I simply cannot afford anything better. Plus, this is the only BS/MD program that I could find that would even consider (I think?) a "less than stellar" applicant such as myself. I am very interested in going into primary care, and the three essay's (except the first topic essay) pretty much revolved around my commitment to primary care, and how I can relate to the people who are currently living in undeserved areas that are in dire need of physicians. Unfortunately, based on my ACT test scores alone, I'm not sure I'll even be given a chance. T_T Anyway, here is a little more about me (I'm basing this on the "what are my chances" threads I've looked at earlier)

Gender: Male
Ethnicity: Hispanic (half of my cousins live in Venezuela)
Average: 93.85 unweighted (around a 3.75 GPA, I've kept it consistent throughout high school)
Class Rank: School does not rank unless colleges need it for scholarship considerations or something like that (that's what my guidance counselor told me lol)

SAT's: 1660 (590CR, 480M, 590W, 11 essay)
SAT II's: They're abysmal. I won't even go into those.
ACT: 26 Composite (retaking in September. Thank you ACT test dates )

Regents (grades that I remembered, anyway):
-Living Environment (9th grade...I didn't really care back then): 82
-Earth Science: 85
-Intergrated Algebra 2 w/ Trig: 75 (and that was from trying my best...if you guys couldn't tell already, I'm horrible at Math)
-Regents ELA: 100
-Regents US History and Gov't: 99
-Regents Phy Set/Chemistry: 79 (retaking in August for a 90+)

I take IB classes instead of AP. IB classes are like AP, but supposedly they're more harder and some are even offered in 2 years instead of one. Meh, I don't really know more about that. My school only offers AP Euro, since the other AP's were replaced with IB's.

Classes taken this year with final grades:
-Chemistry Honors: 88
-Chorus: 99
-IB English HL I: 90
-IB History of the America's: 92
-IB Psychology SL: 92 (gonna find out my IB exam grades on the seventh)
-Integrated Algebra 2 w/ Trig: 85
-Health Education: 90 something...my report card was torn, leaving me clueless about the second digit...lol

Senior Schedule:
-IB English HL II
-IB History of the America's HL II
-IB Physics
-IB Living Environment
-IB Math Studies
-Anatomy and Physiology
-Sports Medicine
-Team Sports

And the WISE Internship as well. I'm planning to intern with a Neurosurgeon (the school has been able to get Neurosurgeon's before).

-Honor Roll Grades 9-10
-High Honor Roll Grades 10-11 (and hopefully senior year)
-Health Achievement Award - Grade 11
-5 year National Roll for Piano Guild

EC School Activities:
-Chamber Singers grades 9 and 11
-WISE Internship - Grade 12 (this is planned)
-NYSSMA Grades, All "outstanding", grades 9-11
-Volunteered at the library for the whole summer of my freshman year

Out of School EC's:
-Pianist for 15 years
-Martial Artist, Red/Black stripe ranking - 8 years
-Hospital Volunteering at the Emergency Department - Grades 11-12 (planning to keep up with it senior year)
-200+ hours shadowing various doctors including a Cardiologist and an Anesthesiologist
-Piano Guild Participant - 5 years
-Pianist at the nursing home - Grade 9
-Returning pianist at winter and summer recitals for the Brookville Reformed Church (yes, this means I live on Long Island, but I am far from "rich" or even "middle class") - 10 years
-Youth Group at the Glen Cove Christian Church

Letters of Recommendation:
-Guidance Counselor
-Piano teacher of 15 years
-The Anesthesiologist I mentioned earlier wrote me one, and my guidance counselor said that it was awesome.
-My Chemistry Honors teacher
-My AP Euro teacher from 10th grade

They're all in and ready to go.

-Photographer's assistant - Summer of 2008
-Auto body repair assistant - Summer of 2009

*Well that's pretty much my whole story up until this point. I know my grades are not stellar, but I am hopeful that my commitment to various extracurriculars and my essay's will be more...'loud' than what my grades say. I know that I'm not the best student, but I have always been passionate about everything that I have done, even though some results may have been less than "stellar". But nonetheless, I NEED TO KNOW if I stand at chance. Should I even apply?*

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I'm not sure how well this relates to the prompt but it would be great if I could get some feedback so I could send this out.

Prompt:To aid the Admissions Committee in learning more about you, please share your current influences and interest for pursuing a career in medicine.

"Creating A Better World"

The amazing world of medicine has fascinated me ever since I was a young girl, a fact that isn't all that surprising when my family's history is considered. Many people in my family chose to pursue careers in the health care field which, of course, impacted my feelings for this field and actually prompted me to apply to a school like the Sophie Davis School of Biomedical Education. My grandmother is a retired nurse and my mother is a nurse practicioner so if I were to work towards obtaining a degree as a nurse practitioner, that would actually make me a third generation nurse, something that would no doubt make my family proud.

Being the independently minded young lady that I am, I have chosen to forgo such a pursuit and forge a new path combining a degree in nanotechnology and medicine in order to improve the quality of healthcare available in society. Looking around at the world today, it's quite startling to see how many people lack a basic necessity like the provision of a basic healthcare system. Too many people are not able to access healthcare services for reasons that should not carry as much weight as they do when it comes to dealing with a person's health. Unfortunately, things like the status of a person's citizenship, how educated she is and how much money she has, play a large role in determining the quality of healthcare she could receive.

I want to change that, and make it possible for anyone in need of healthcare to be able to receive it without difficulty. My desire is to immerse myself in medical education in order to gather the skills I will need to lend a hand in decreasing the disparity in healthcare. According to the medical report "Crossing The Quality Chasm: A New Health System For The 21st Century"1 the problems in today's healthcare have created a huge gap between where we are and where we should be. Poor organization and a lack of proper motivation has prevented things from progressing as they should, leaving today's healthcare system severely lacking, something that is only hurting people.

I know that so great a task is nearly impossible for one person if many minds, far more educated than mine, still haven't achieved goals created in 2000, as seen in the Healthy People 2010 and Healthy 20202 objectives. Seeing how difficult it has been to implement certain programs in healthcare like increasing the number of people who have a specific source of ongoing care and decreasing the number of people who were unable to obtain or delayed in obtaining necessary medical attention, make me want to be a part of the solution. With a greater number of medical graduates, the number of people receiving delayed medical attention should decrease, which would bring the goals of Healthy People 2020 closer to being completely fulfilled. Perhaps that entire list of goals will actually be achieved by 2020, unlike the previous set of goals meant to have been reached by 2010.

If I were granted the privilege of working towards a medical degree in the Sophie Davis School of Biomedical Education, it would bring me one step closer to being able to help bridge the healthcare chasm and be immersed in what I love. To be able to expand my knowledge of the human body and grasp its many complexities are just two of the benefits of attaining a medical degree. I am eager to begin this journey and learn all that I can.



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